Do you like negative comments? Most people don't, but I find they can inspire as much as positive remarks.
Last week I talked about the Pyramid Style of Writing. James Mowery, another Performancing blogger, commented on my post. Though I disagreed with some of his commentary, I wholeheartedly agree with James about the importance of a strong introductory sentence as a key to getting readers to read your blog or article, essay, screenplay, or book. In the book biz, we call that a hook sentence.
So I'll give James Mowery credit for inspiring today's blog.
A few years ago, I gave a presentation to a room full of novelists. Since I know not only the importance of a strong hook sentence but also the importance of a good title, I called the workshop The Happy Hooker.
Yep, that packed the room. Seriously, that's what you always need to keep in mind when opening your piece of writing whatever it might be. You have a few seconds to hook the reader.
The Art of Fishing
It's like fishing. You bait the hook. The bait is the title and/or any artwork. You want to capture the reader's attention so that he or she stops and looks.
Once the hook is baited, it waits for the fish to bite. In our analogy, once the reader stops cruising - whether you're talking about a reader in a bookstore or a reader on the Internet - because you've captured his attention with the bait, you have a few seconds to see if he will bite and be hooked.
Those few seconds are when he reads the first sentence. That sentence has got to have something compelling in it to make him read the second sentence and the third. If he reads the second and third and on to the rest of the copy, you have succeeded in hooking him.
Last week on Sling Words, I wrote a two-parter on hook sentences in books, giving examples one day and telling why they work the second day.
I suspect, from a lot of web copy and blogs I read, many writers don't realize the importance of crafting a compelling sentence. Perhaps they stumbled into Internet writing and haven't really studied the art and craft of writing before. There are many wonderful books out there to help improve writing skills. (I call it your Writer's Tool Kit.) Writer's Digest publishes a magazine, books, and has a great website for you to take advantage of.
5 Ways to Create Hook Sentences
1. Make a startling or interesting statement then follow it with a factual statement. (See my opening above.)
2. Begin by evoking an emotional reaction in the reader. Laughter, tears, anger, disgust, whatever you elicit, make sure it has a universality which gets the same response from someone in Houston as it does someone in Rio or Prague. We are all basically the same human animal once you remove the trappings of our respective cultures. What makes me cry, more than likely makes someone in Tokyo cry. This will cause the reader to stick with you from the first word to the last.
3. By description but only if it is a compelling description of something or someone remarkable. Most people don't get hooked by reading about an amazing sunset unless you're talking about the sunset as seen from a bar in Key West AND you use such evocative terms that make the reader lust after an ice-cold mojito.
4. By speech, meaning you directly quote or paraphrase what someone said. Maybe it's a joke Leno told that is germane to what you're writing about or something a kindergartener said about Life. Maybe it's the dying words of a soldier. Again, the keys are: compelling quotation and appealing to emotion.
5. By name dropping. Hey, face it. We're a celebrity culture. There are millions who will stop to read: Paris Hilton gives fashion advice to female inmates. They'll turn a blind eye to: High school home economics teacher gives fashion advice to female inmates.
These are just 5 ways from many. Study a little and find the other ways. When you can easily craft a great opening sentence, you'll be a happy hooker too.
Takeaway Truth
Don't be afraid to write a beginning and toss it away. Sometimes you have to write just to figure out what you’re trying to say. Don’t look at your words as if they are carved in stone. Be willing to experiment.